Nice close ups and night landscapes. I liked the one that looked black and white (towards the middle) and the one with the moon.
Your essay lacks continuity, that is, there doesn't seem to be a logical sequence from one thing to another. You have Harlaxton, then you travel other places, then you return to Harlaxton. You also start with a plane shot, but we don't seem to have much of a clear ending here. I thought the essay ended a few times with a few shots that looked like you were getting back onto the plane.
It would also have been nice to have had some idea of where we were. Although captions weren't necessary, I wanted to see a shot of a sign indicating where we were. The shot of Harlaxton College sign probably should have been a little earlier in the essay.
Nice close ups and night landscapes. I liked the one that looked black and white (towards the middle) and the one with the moon.
ReplyDeleteYour essay lacks continuity, that is, there doesn't seem to be a logical sequence from one thing to another. You have Harlaxton, then you travel other places, then you return to Harlaxton. You also start with a plane shot, but we don't seem to have much of a clear ending here. I thought the essay ended a few times with a few shots that looked like you were getting back onto the plane.
It would also have been nice to have had some idea of where we were. Although captions weren't necessary, I wanted to see a shot of a sign indicating where we were. The shot of Harlaxton College sign probably should have been a little earlier in the essay.